Dream Deep

Hooyah, IceCreamMan. That was brilliant! I really loved it - and I know what you mean by the silence in piano being the little moment in time where you get ...

Whoa. Hmmm... What to say? I really liked the way this was written, I really liked the characterization (VG on that), but perhaps you could have streched it out a ...

Very very very good. Gorgeous, beautiful. (Did I mention pretty?) Just one question. *grins* You don't happen to like writing 'long lost love/current i love you' poems and the like, ...

This had a good premise, but it sort of died by the end, like you just wanted to get the ending over and done with. The idea was fantastic, but ...

I thought this was pretty good, but I do agree wth Duskglimmer on some things. Pretty decent premise, but some of the character's reactions - at the movies, for example ...

I loved this. I suppose it made no specific sense, but the images are beautiful. I didn't really get the whole dy(e)ing and sounds thing, but I didn't have to. ...

Hooyah, JigSaw. I think this is the best poem I've read on YWS. Kudos. You've earned my respect and admiration. Wonderfully well done. :smt006 -Dream Deep

I was sort of confused, but it really drew me in. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. This is gonna sound so stupid, but the 'Stood up again refreshed' bit sounds ...

I thought it was pretty good, but that rhyme scheme! Here, look at the first stanza: You're exposed, You and your pack of wolves, So don't throw me your dirty ...

Ah, I like this very much. You write extremely well, Neost. I just found one inconsitancy: Slowly, I back away towards my door and quickly closed it and locked it. ...

Good message, loved the first line. The rhyme scheme seemed a little simplistic for such a deep message, though. Maybe change that? Anyway, good job on this. :D

Wow. No. Let me reiderate. WOW. That was amazing. Either publish a book of poetry of I'll give you a whack upside the head. :twisted: That was so good. Kudos ...

Well. Hi. I like it. The fact that you mentioned the "vibrations" you feel through the ball sort of demonstrates the energy of the poem, I think. Also, good description: ...

Ah. Congrats, dele24. You do better than me at this sort of thing. Very well written. I could picture this hapening, but on occasion the dialogue seemed a little bit ...

Proofread the spaces. Now. Get to it. Nice. But these are my feelings over the ending: :smt021 ](*,) :smt062 So abrupt, was there really a point ? Also, just a ...